StoryWeaver13

The first thing I thought was, "Well, this is a little pessimistic," (even though it's really pretty and things I've thought about on a daily basis), but then the last ...

This was so cool! *liked Anyway, your style really is detached and queer, which is so cool. Only a few people can really pull this off without making it dry, ...

I thought this was good, just a few little things. & Unforgettable times. First, I'd write "and" instead of "&" in all of the places where you do that. I'd ...

So far, this is really cool. I'm usually not into fantasy just because stories of vampires and elves (ESPECIALLY vampires, ugh, thank you Stephanie Meyer) but this has something unique ...

Dinner is still being digested in Tani’s stomach as her and her family drive down Main Street towards their home. It’s the day before her birthday and she’s excited because ...

Hey, thought I'd return your favor of reading my novel for reading yours! And so far, I like it. :D I just have a few things to pick on you ...

This was really deep and descriptive, and I liked the intertwining images within this. There was also a good sense of flow and rhythm, and the whole thing was just ...

This is good, but if I were ou I'd have this moved to the "lyrics" forum instead. I think the mods can help you with that if you send somebody ...

I really like your style, it's fast-paced with good word choice, and gives a really good mental image and some honest depth in your characters. Plot-wise I don't have any ...

Poppies grow among the mossy stones, about and around them; Some rest their heads on these stones as on a pillow for weariness; You use "stones" twice, so I'd change ...

I'm not really a fan of angsty "emo" poetry, but there was something sort of sweet-sounding about this, almost soft-spoken. So...I like this more than I usually like this type ...

I'll be honest; I wasn't a fan of this because of a few points - -It was list-like, and kind of dull -Part of it just sounds a little shallow ...

I like this! I wish I could know how it's intended to sound, but I think with a good beat this could be a really good song, something I'd listen ...

Running through the woods I could hear his laughter all around me. I think you should just start with "I could hear his laughter all around me." Then add the ...

Cool, I really like this, and I'm not the romantic-fiction kinda person. Honestly, though, I don't even have anything to really complain about. It was a good plot and I ...