StoryWeaver13

Cool, I wrote a poem like that only with "cherry stems" on the side, and I always thought that was a cool challenge. Definitely have to say, whether your writer's ...

Okay, so like vampires it seems that angels/demons are becoming cliche, and I really haven't had that much interest in reading the stuff. So, I was surprised that this actually ...

Well, this poem really isn't my style just because I feel like it has the typical teenage-issue of verging on angsty or emo, but you know this was considerably alright ...

Wow, this is really good. I like that it isn't over-articulated, but there's still that feeling of something deeper and honest about it that makes it feel sweet. You use ...

This was an interesting story idea, but like Silver pointed out there are a LOT of typos, which makes it really hard to read. Also, it didn't transition well. It ...

I'm not really a huge haiku person because they're so short (I mean who can really express something that quickly?) but this was pretty nice. My only real problem is ...

This love , this one love , sinful is her crime, Not quite sure I get what you're saying here... Our bed sheets were shaken without thy presence. Why "thy?" ...

I thought, since you'd been keeping up on my novel, I'd take a look at something of yours. So glad I did. Seriously, this is...brilliant. I wasn't familiar with the ...

And, of course, it started to rain. So there I huddled, in the dirt, shivering in the rain. Rain's used twice, and it makes it repetitive. Okay, so my general ...

He’s only(?) in exactly one of her classes. He’s very athletic and extremely smart. He’s really into music and videogames. Saying he's in exactly one class just seems a little ...

First off, welcome to the site! Okay, so for a starter piece this isn't terrible at all, but my problem starts from the first line - it sounds like it's ...

Okay, so I'm really not a sci-fi/fantasy kind of person, but this is pretty cool. I think you have an interesting character, as her flaws are just kind of intriguing. ...

It was a neat freak ' s worst nightmare come to life. Thank god I wasn’t one of those people. So with that I began the super long process of ...

Okay, so the first reviewer did a really good job picking this apart, so I'll just emphasize a couple things that really bugged me. This needs some cleaning up grammar-wise, ...

Okay, so just finished the review of your prologue and now I'm here, and I've got to say this is pretty good. The only problem is that you're lacking the ...