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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Frozen

    I usually don't like rhyming poetry much, but I actually liked this a lot. It got better as you continued, the beginning a little rough, but I liked the ideas ...

    Oct 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Cataract Operation

    I really liked this, it's simplistic but at the same time has a lot to it. There's a really nice flow and the way you weaved it together was pretty ...

    Oct 2, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Little Popeet: The Lost Child

    Oh, this was sweet! I liked that it had a happy ending, which becomes pretty scarce sometimes, doesn't it? Well I definitely liked the whole general idea, and I'm not ...

    Oct 2, 2011
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: A Risk Worth Taking

    As everybody's been saying, it would've been nice to have some back-story, possibly involving whether or not this was her first time handling a gun. Also possibly a glimpse at ...

    Oct 1, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Saved

    Aww so short! But you've said you're going to extend it, which is a good idea. One thing I kind of noticed around the beginning was that the sentence structures ...

    Oct 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Dead Crow

    He saw a dead crow, in a drain, No comma needed on the first line. and a baby barely able to breath e in a crowded morning clinic. This land ...

    Oct 1, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: XXX

    Hey, so I'm here to pick this apart a little bit! First thing I'm noticing right off the bat (still on the first paragraph as I write this part) is ...

    Sep 29, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: All that happened

    Okay, so I'm apologizing ahead of time for my lack of ability to review romance. Not really my area, and I've got to say I have a habit of being ...

    Sep 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The masquerade

    In Our life time We've got to face many changes Some make us as good as can be But some make you suffer Worse than your wildest dreams. My two ...

    Sep 29, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Space Between Infinity- 1

    It isn't often a novel ends up on the front of this site, so I knew this probably had to be either really good or something stupidly hyped like "Twilight." ...

    Sep 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Snow White Spoof

    Haha, I loved this. There were definitely a couple lines where it was a bit of a stretch and it didn't completely make sense, but all the same, I thought ...

    Sep 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Love

    I have a couple issues with this poem and so I'll warn you that I'm in the mood to tear this apart. First is that it's lackluster in imagery or ...

    Sep 24, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Chapter one Of Speechless

    Even for a prologue, this is incomplete. I feel like we just don't have enough suspense built up in this yet, like it needed to drag out a little longer ...

    Sep 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Forlorn

    *Applause* Ha ha, okay, anyway. I know that isn't much of a critique. But this was verryyy deep, and I found myself delving deeper and deeper into the feeling of ...

    Sep 18, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Musings of a Quiet God: Fragments

    I'm an open-minded Christian and take no offense to this, at all. In fact I find it interesting because these type of things (ie. who created God, what does He ...

    Sep 18, 2011


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