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wherever she walks This stands out since the rest of the piece is in past tense.

Wow. I'm not much of a poetry critic, but this is good. There are just few things I'd like to mention. Make me soon see red Perhaps this would flow ...

You seem to have a problem with run-on sentences. She watched as cars whizzed by her urban household, where were they all going, where is there left to run to? ...

Howdy, Mr. Blog. It's rather unusual to post works in the welcome forum. Where are you from? What are your interests besides writing?

I noticed that you sometimes switch to present tense. It shouldn't be hard to find and correct. Also, arrows are kept in a quiver; he wouldn't pull one from his ...

Good job, though I noticed you put an unnecessary space before a comma several times.

“Michigan boy, huh” she said, smiling. “That’s where I’m from. There are two mistakes here. A comma goes right after 'huh' and you're missing the end quotes. Overall, this was ...

whether form the exercise or alcohol he couldn’t tell. Small mistake- 'form' ought to be 'from'. There aren't any other spelling errors.

I like this. It's hard to say much about a haiku, but this accomplishes its mission.

Hello there, Storyweaver. I just wanted to point out something. A very few times you switched tenses- it's an easy mistake, and hopefully just as easy to fix.

I salute you for having no spelling or grammatical errors. Er... what else can I say? It's well written, and offers an inside perspective on twins.

Good job in creating a likable protagonist.

How old is the main character? Is he a boy or is she a girl? The knowledge that this book held will be forthcoming for my duty. That is what ...

Sol, this is excellent. The only thing that bothers me is that the plural of "leaf" is "leaves". But hey, engles es loco.

You know, Brian Jacques once inquired "What happened to the magic?" Perhaps that has nothing to do with Harry, but still. I should most likely spend some time in the ...