chapter 1 of Calisan and the Lantern of Deceit

I really do like the story. The concept is great, and I like the characters and the descriptions that were in there. The beginning line I had a minor problem with, and a few of those beginning sentences could probably be combined to make them seem less like run-ons. That's just how I see it though. Overall, I truly did like the story. If there is more to come, I can't wait to read it. Anyway, keep writing, and may the Force be with you.

I noticed that you sometimes switch to present tense. It shouldn't be hard to find and correct. Also, arrows are kept in a quiver; he wouldn't pull one from his back unless someone had shot him.

dallascow222 wrote:The moon was shining as bright as its sister, the sun, had just a few hours before. Calisan moved up a little bit closer to the antiquated oak tree. He leaned in closer to firmly press his ear to the trunk. The bark smelled of fire. There were no leaves just dead branches. Calisan looked up at the sky. It had an eerie taste to it tonight. A score of stars were visible in just this tiny window of light. It was not usual for this many stars to be shining at once. At that moment he saw something run across a fallen tree directly to his left. He slowly turned his head with extreme attentiveness. He did this because he has heard of stories of strange beasts that lurk the woods of Starrowyn Forest
He pulled out an arrow out of his back, his ears slowly twitching in the wind. His eyes widened at the sight of what he saw.
The eyes were of feint silver with a thin tinted blue. The body was riddled with a silver flesh. Its mouth smelled of an urgent need of hunger. Calisan guardedly took cover by that same oak tree.

The beast didn't fully see him.