Stori

That was beautiful. The description was good. The idea of a lonely child is well spoken.

Ok, what's a POTC? I know what you mean about him having no personality... This was a fluke from the start. :(

Well... I don't know what to say. The plot is well done, especially the way you wove the vision in with the storm.

Ok. Could I place this in my blog? So far I just wrote as it came to me. Thanks for the advice, and keep reading.

Bravo! I think free verse poetry might catch on. Great poem, and I like the way you mention your son at the end.

I like the description, like, "The eerie glow is comforting..." The very contradiciton helps out. And, "My tratorous lids slide closed."

I think this should go under "dark fiction." The story is bizarre, and what's with the doll?

Ah, me... Clear some things up for a newbie. Who or what are the "Winged Mercenaries," and what's their purpose? Who are these winged people?

Yes, he can change. This is from my novel in progress, and I just wrote this as a 'new view' on the story.

Is this a strictly military fiction? I think that would be ok, since the writing is well done. I like the idea of a floating city. Well, anyway, I'm Kyte. ...

I love Star Wars, and I like this post. Is there any more? BTW, have you ever read Alan Dean Foster's work? He wrote "Splinter of the Mind's Eye" and ...