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I don't see how this relates to an earthquake. It's more like an old man's ramblings.

Wow. It grabbed my attention and held it till the end. A good piece. But where's the rest?

I'm wondering, why doesn't Courage have a heart and lungs? Is it natural?

It's kinda hard to understand. Why is the girl out there? How come she says she wouldn't be surprised by ESP?

It's cool. But who is the narrator? You? A friend? A character?

A character... only I didn't get far with the story. :(

Hi Jess. Great poem! Repetition works here. Yup, it's usually discouraged, but this worked.

Yeah, I am. I'll change the title.. should be Rogue, right?

Yeah, thanks. It's a 'new side' of the movie Endless Waltz .

Ok, first off this confused me. First you had a quote, they third person, then first. That's not so good. So, either name the character beforehand or start a new ...

Thanks, all. And Ryter, hi. I'm glad you think so much of "Clone."

Just a thought: folks are going to get Dee and Demetri confused.

Well, I guess it's a long O, not U. And yes, he's a good guy. He doesn't want to be caught in a war anymore.

Hey, wait a minute. "She then called an emergency to all the wolves in the area." If there are guards, and this is an urban area, it should be silent. ...

Lancirst, I like your name. And this was good. Can't say anything is exactly wrong.