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Glad I could help. :)

Thanks. I'll do my best to continue this, though first I need to do some world-building. Or should that be station-building? :) If you want, I can send you a ...

Thanks, Redford. The reason it's so short is that it's not finished. I've never played Mass Effect, but it sounds interesting. With the "Hundred Suns" series I'm trying to steer ...

It looks like this has been reviewed thoroughly, so I'll just comment. I like this poem both because of its subject matter and because it doesn't rhyme. After all, rhyme ...

Just wanted to mention the rhyme scheme. Fantastic.

I meant to leave a review, but the only thing I can suggest is breaking up those long paragraphs.

Hey there, Nether. It seems others have made my point, so I'll be brief. What you have here reads more like an essay than the start of a novel. Now ...

There are a few instances where you changed tenses, but that's it for grammar. Your piece is fantastic and I hope there's more.

Isaiah turned to watch her leave then turned back to Tara. “A real delight she is, huh?” Isaiah smirked. Any reason why these shouldn't be in the same paragraph? ;) ...

Thanks, Cailey. This was a spur-of-the-moment thing, prompted by Fox Amoore's instrumental piece "I Am Here".

What do you mean by "hiding the emotion"?

I'm at sixes and sevens here. Aiden has turned out to be female; also I'm trying to change everything so she's blind from birth. (Having her suddenly lose her sight ...

All right then. No wonder we don't see more Nate originals. (I'm kidding; please don't sue me.)

I begin to see! 'Tis obvious that I need to clarify a few facts- among them, that Golda is the female in question.

Um. I'm not a rider, but something bothers me. Why would anyone geld a thoroughbred and give him a silly name like Fruit Cake?