Stori

I think you should keep the name Deuce.

A poem that length needs some punctuation. Other than that, I liked it.

It needs a little work. Few spelling mistakes, nothing major. You might want to slow down and talk a little about the characters and setting. Give us more of a ...

Bravo! I only noticed one mistake: you slipped into third person during the talk with Ms. Roberts.

Correct me if I'm wrong, but I think you mentioned her living in Canada twice.

The language is a little dense, I think. And what is "eves ago" supposed to mean?

Well, I know absolutely nothing about sonnets, so I can't offer much. This was well written and gets the point across.

This sounds like a retelling of Frankenstein. Which is a good thing.

I don't know, maybe this should go under science fiction. It's too early to tell.

Creepy. I thought it would be a nice, friendly urban story right up until the end.

Great imagery. I like it.

If I were you I'd cut back on the exclamation marks.

Wow.

Wow. I like the expression of self here.

The first two words I thought about this were "Oh, wow." It's a great idea. And it seems we have a new genre to write in: "angleic fiction." I'll finish ...