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after all the effort. "All that effort"; don't worry so much about it though.

he’d shouted at me. He’d shouted at me and my little sister Sophie. You may want to fix this.

who inhabited her domain. Up till now, you never referred to the lake as "she." I did as I was bade, I'm fairly sure this ought to be "as I ...

You seem to have misplaced the "Y" in "Every".

As a matter of fact, I've been letting this story collect dust. I'll do my best to polish this up and add more.

Antonio started,” Make sure you fix that quotation mark. Good story.

It generally isn't polite to us all capital letters. “I’m getting good to go reports from the mechanical engineers, the scientist s

You still tend to refer to Gray as "him" sometimes, "it" other times.

Just wondering, Esther. Do the characters have names?

Hi Kara. I just spotted one error in the story. patch relations with the them? Just go ahead and remove "the".

A more recent entry to this... Bridge to Terebithia. They fairly well ignored the author's story and put in some nice special effects. If you want a movie adaptation of ...

Have one thing to point out. A!, I think you must've been holding down the shift key. No worries!

By the way, I caught two small mistakes here. The first, in the title, is "and" in place of "an". After that, where it says investors would clamber to help ...

All that's true. In fact my family has a set of the encyclopedias you described.

Hi. I just had one little concern here. You tend to order sentences, "While doing this, I did that." Check the fourth paragraph. I believe it ought to be "rang" ...