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You have a few errors here. Like using "new" instead of "knew." And it should be "of course" instead of "coarse." Besides that, a good work. Unusual title too. :D

Hi, and welcome to the site. There were a few errors in tense here, but overalll a good poem. If you allow me to loving you, Then I'd told these ...

The sentences are a nightmare! They run into each other every which way. Try something like this... Noon sunlight poured down on the valley. The villagers stirred, smiling to each ...

Hi all. It's Kyte, for those who don't know. The story was good, yes, and the sky metaphor had a place. And I like this: "If smog was a verb, ...

It's great, but every single line doesn't have to be funny. And the "Muffin Man" part from Shrek... Cool. "Married to the muffin man?" "THE MUFFIN MAN!" Now, if you're ...

Gosh, another Kyte! Hi! Down to business. It's short, too short. Yes, it's manga, but still. And maybe: (sarcastic) It's great! It's all fine! or something like that. "Distressed" is ...

Gosh, this is a little adult. You used the expression "the other," which I've only seen in older writers. :D Well, I like it. Are the names Eskimo, or did ...

Oh, Pendragon :D I used to read those. It's neat how the author alternates between Bobby and his friends. I read up to "The Realiy Bug" and was never disappointed. ...

Some mistakes. "He possibly could have killed Jacob" needs to go. "Possibly" and "might have" are the same thing. And you spelled "meters" the British way. Well, okay, there's one. ...

Yeah, I loved them too. So, the poems would be hard to find fault with. They're great for reading aloud. Bear in mind, all my recent poetry has been lyrics. ...

I totally agree. (Hey that's the second time I wrote 'totally.') "A grand total of seven chapters tugged my story-line every which way." I agree; my new work, "Lady of ...

This is totally funny! It reminds me of 'The Pink panther' meets 'Teacher from the Black Lagoon.' With the teacher playing both Cluseau and the Black Lagoon monster, lol. The ...

OMG, that was twisted!! The description was totally shattered by the last line: "Not when they were both men." Scary :shock: I don't know; what is this based on?

I love the names; they're so original. A few errors: "The sword was sheathed in a scabbard." That means the same thing, so you could say, "It was sheathed in ...

I think this is good, but what's it based on? And the sentence, "Get ready for hyperspace," would work better with "he adivsed" or something. That's me, but "reported" isn't ...