Starleene

OK I am here to review!! Lets get started Captain: Did I love this man? Did he love me? Why is she saying yes if she doesn't know if she ...

Oh wow, this was really good. I liked it. :) OK I only have one thing to say so here it is: “Tempus, Goddess of Time, you torture your people! ...

Hey Hey Starleene here! OK lets get going: Though you're dressed in rags you wear an air of queenly grace Just a spelling error :) She ? and ? was ...

Woww! this was really insightful. I really liked the last lines, they just add that extra spark to your poem to make it extra special. Loved it!! Keep writing, I ...

Like posters' before me said capitalize your "I's". This was a really great poem, very straight forward. If you really read it and let it sink in, I think this ...

Im Back!!! This was amazing, but you know that already so..anyway I didn't catch to many flaws, acually I caught none. :) I want to know what is bothering the ...

Hi Hi I'm Back! OK so the above reviewers have done a pretty good job of getting the grammer and researching things. Hm i would suggest that you take there ...

Hey! I love the conversation between the boy and his mother. It seems like something that any kid would say to his or her mother. But about the part where ...

DAMMIT! Try to use all caps sparingly, but its best not to use all caps at all. Up in the front row, the other Catholic kids started crossing themselves too. ...

Ok so just a couple questions: Is the point of view from a girl or a boy. And second what made they person go crazy and start on a killing ...

Oh Snap! That was great:) I haven't read many stories in 2nd person, but I'm glad i read yours. It was so worth it. No grammar errors. Punctuation was perfect, ...

Im sorry but the part were her friend spills the beans about her loving him, that part is hilarious. Partly because i can totaly relate and partly just because its ...

You know i have to agree with both of them, your a great writer. You know just when to bring the readerin and just when to keep them hanging. This ...

I agree with guitaragrl...The first part was a bit boring. Add spicier words to draw the reader in, but i think that the plot is pretty good, just keep in ...

Umm hey, you need to really work on the comma issue like the ones before me. Try to use more descriptive words, phrases and sentences. You gave the actions but ...