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I'm back! Like the others, Medusa was mortal. She had had two immortal sisters who were currently living on Olympus, and her mortality had been a defect of her birth. ...

Hello Rosey. I lay on my side along the cave’s wall, waiting for the dragon to step past me and meet my master. My arm tensed at the sound of ...

Hello JD. I sat on the pier, my hair flying in the wind acting in it’s own rebellious way. Acting in it's own rebellious way? Isn't that telling? How did ...

Hello Vox. Sorry this took longer to get out. The bitter wind was edged in ice, stinging like the talons of a falcon; the slate stratus an omen of the ...

Hello Kara. “I’m a liar, a bitch and nobody all at once. Now you know. So go away. Leave me alone. Shoo.” My voice is muffled but I’m sure he ...

Hello Teddy! "plays with ears" I'll be honest with you, I didn't like this at all. I thought this was quite random and rushed, simply because your ideas (although they ...

Hello Furball. I think I had a pretty good idea of what you were trying to do with this piece (though I'm not entirely certain). Your first chapter read like ...

Lol this was pretty funny, I was actually laughing in real life and singing to it. Good job there lol. I think maybe you could elaborate more as to why ...

Hey there Elinor. What I quite like about this piece is how you've integrated bits of Greek mythology into your story. I find your portrayal of Medusa, Athena and Poseidon ...

Hi there. The Grand Necromancer looked upon his apprentice with pure scorn. Being more specific about his facial expressions. Eg: Does his nostrils widen? What about trying to describe a ...

Hey there Elinor. After reading this, I admit I actually struggled to find something to critique on. It's rather well written and flows rather nicely. However, I then found out ...

Hey there Lily! Sorry this took so long (smacks himself). Anyways. Quick nitpicks first. It was hard yet not to notice the perfect symmetry of her chest, two glorious orbs ...

Hello Karsten. I think what you've written here is pretty solid overall, but I think you can do better than this. I've reread this about 2-3 times and most of ...

Hey there Kyousuke. Personally, I think you should of start your story from some vital point of the tournament. To me, this feels as though I'm in some boardroom meeting ...

Hey there El. Did I post a review for the original? I remember reading the original, but can't remember whether if I typed up a review on it or not. ...