SpiritedWolfe

Hello there, ccwriting. Interesting story you have here, I must say. It's interesting how the beginning has a really sort of animalistic/wild feeling towards it like every man for himself. ...

Hey there, Dracula! I'll just start with some things that I noticed while reading. You have a really interesting beginning, starting with Ron and Lavander Brown kissing, but the very ...

Hello there, AMDDOG. I'll just dive right into the criticism. To start it all off, we're overloaded with names of dragons of the like, but we're not given any reason ...

Hey, LittleFox! Let's dive right into this. First paragraph starts talking about this mountain pass. As pretzel did mention, it was really summed up, which I thought was fine, but ...

Hey, LittleFox! I'm finally here ~ Right off the bat, you have the winter and heat thing getting mixed together. My issue isn't with the description itself, since I feel ...

Hey, Cynder! The first paragraph there is has a really strange formatting, adding in these kind of end-of-sentence-tag-ons as their own sentence. It makes for a really choppy feel and ...

Hey, Cynder! Back again ;) So, to start it off, we're straight up told every little thing that this MC is training in, but not necessarily why or why we ...

Hey, Cynder! I'm going to mention this quickly, even though Wolfie did say to ignore it. I don't have an issue with it in particular, starting the chapter with emphasized ...

Hey again, Cynder! Wow, this installment is much shorter this time around. I'll start by backing up Wolfie's first point. Just saying the pole is rather confusing, and I had ...

Hey there, Cynder! You don't seem to have enough followers on this novel of yours, so I decided to check it out. (Plus I'm much more comfortable with prose xD). ...

Hey, R4! Yeeeess~ That ending though. Now, that's a really awesome way to pull the author right back into the story without anyone else realizing it. Even the ending just ...

Hey, r4! Alright, l second all of Kyllorac's points because those were some things that really stood out to me when I was reading through it, like how the sentence ...

Hey, niteowl! I'll be perfectly honest with you, I really did not expect this. For 'not usually writing prose', this is fantastic, yet there is still some improvement to be ...

Hello again, rocket dog! I'll start off with some things that I noticed while reading. It must have been late in the day when it happened. So, this is one ...

Hey there, Holy! So, I see you have a really fantastic review from BlueAfrica (and I second basically all her points) but I'll see if I can be helpful with ...