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Re: You Say
I really liked this and I can't wait to read more of your works soon...Keep up the good work!!!!! I love this and I hope to see more from you ...
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Re: My Home
I love this Kit Kat!!! Like it reminds me of Spring and of the Earth and it makes me truly happy haha. It is sort of bland but like in ...
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Re: Another Girl
As others have pointed out this is rather bland but it has magnificent potential!!!! Just add to it and throw yourself into those feelings and write them into it...if you ...
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Re: Heirs to the Light- Festival
Hey Stori!!! I have one thing to say: describe. Not that this is bad! No not at all just need to expand it and add more detail. I'm really confused ...
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Re: Dearly Beloved
Wow amazing!!! I really liked it XD Good job and keep up the good work hehe. I hope to read more of your works soon ^^ Good luck and Happy ...
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Re: The Soul Collector- 2
Still doing amazing Alex!!! ^^ Good job I liked this chapter very much. I like your style of writing and I can't wait to read more of it tomorrow when ...
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Re: The Soul Collector- 1
Truly amazing Alex!!! This made me cry and laugh. It was beautiful and I truly truly can't wait for more!!! Keep up the good work and I will most definitely ...
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Re: Counting Breaths: Prologue
Her name was Lila. She was 9 years old. She was walking home from school when she saw the smoke. It billowed out from around the garage door, black and ...
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Re: Chapter 1 - The Memory Key
I'm sorry I had meant to review this long before now haha. Alas, I became so busy I wasn't able to finish reading it due to an insane amount of ...
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Re: Dreams Tell Lies - Prologue (new)
The mystery of this is compelling me to keep going haha. Good job with this and the air of mystery and the details you placed in this made me want ...
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Re: Currently Unnamed (Chapter Three)
So the plot continues to thicken and the mystery continues haha. Good job with this...I'm not one to point out many grammar or spelling errors so sorry for the inability ...
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Re: GONE
I often avoided the library. It was full of dusty books, nerds scrambling to finish typing some report , This is only an opinion but I wouldn't use a comma: ...
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Re: Always stick together Chapter 1
Near the beginning you have the main character asking the little brother if he wanted to help wake Summer up but you forget to capitalize her name. Other than that ...
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Re: Currently Unnamed (Chapter One)
I really liked this Cairo!!! Really adds to the air of mystery XD. Good job and I will most definitely be keeping tabs on this novel! Keep up the good ...
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Re: XXX
Ok so I really like this story gives a very impressive ring to it haha. Good job and I have one correction as of now. In the line "Are you ...
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