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Re: Nightshade Chapter 4.5
This is a very well written chapter! I love how the action keeps going. It really sucks readers in and holds their attention. I love your characters, David and Silvia. ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Crazy, Stupid, Brilliant
Thank you for posting this! I think I'll go see Crazy, Stupid, Love now! It's good to know that Steve Carrel has once again done a great job. I'm not ...
Jul 30, 2011 -
Re: Inter
First of all, I really like your title. "Inter" as you probably know, is the Latin word for "between", which is very appropriate. I loved your story. It takes a ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: The Unwritten
I loved the suspense and the action! Your style is one that draws the reader in, which is key in good (and addicting) writing. It will keep readers hooked and ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: Dianna McKenna
I like where this is going. The beginning is very sad, but that's good because your character has some very realistic emotional baggage, which I'm assuming will come into play ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: Rejected
Ouch! I really feel the speaker's pain and frustration at being rejected. The rhyme and rhythm are both very common, but that's okay because something common is a good base ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: On Memories and the Momentum of Moments
This is a very good poem. It's well paced with clear meaning. Your poem has a vaguely musical quality to it, which makes it very readable. I can't really think ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Out of the Dark
This is very good! You are good at creating suspense and moving the plot well. That said, you could have made the chapter a little longer, or built the suspense ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: oh, those teenage years
Hey, I love this story. It's very cute and quite true to life. Most of your grammar was addressed in the last review, so I'll talk about format. Your format ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Storm
What I liked: The impressionism. I like how your poem bounce around, but it wasn't too all over the place. All the ideas in here still add up to one ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: deleted
I really like where this story is going! Are the missing/killed child and the wolf connected? Did the wold kill the child? OH THE SUSPENSE!…Suspense and loose ends are really ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: My Window
Wow, I see why you posted the image! The format was brilliant and really helped express the poem. For the first few lines, I didn't quite understand what was going ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: War
Very strong and solid, but not overly rigid. The metric scheme was uneven…but I liked it! It fit in well with the artistic form of the poem. I especially like ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Always and forever
I love this poem! It has a strong message that people understand and (unfortunately) endure every day. The rhyme scheme is simple, but that works well for the poem. Maybe ...
Jul 13, 2011
