Someguy

Because you're new I won't be harsh. It is really great. You say it as if you are lying next to him. It is not bad and if you keep ...

I read it at school so you know what I said, but, I want to get points (Muahuahahahahaha) There are monsters under my bed With their evil eyes gleaming red ...

To know that you have written a good song, the reader must be able to make his/her own beat if you know what I mean. I didn't get that beat ...

First of all. What? I didn't really like this poem. You neede to work on it a little more. I bark at thee to write again, only then can the ...

Are you sure you feel allright? You...write disturbing things. I've killed everyone close to me So they aren't here for me now. No one cares about me, but... Would you ...

It is a good poem. I think there was a few mistakes. Light shines through the top like water through a strainer. I dont know. The rest of the poem ...

Very nice. Very different. Fingers sticky, Sickly sweet. Thick and gloopy, Bad for teeth. Good on pankcakes, Puds and more. Dripping slowly, To the floor. Spoon it out, Onto some ...

Not bad. I don't think this is a poem in a way. You have multiple spelling mistakes. I think ur beautiful by the way. The way get ready for that ...

It was good in a way.Meaningful and deep. It is good, but it doen't put you in the reading mode, if you know what I mean. Some mistakes but can ...

You just need to make spaces. Youre new so I wont start with the spelling and stuff so yeah. It is a nice story, but you could work on it ...

It wasn't good, nor was it bad. I just think you didn't spend much time on this poem. The concept of the poem is good, but it still needs a ...

Very good story line. Love it. And it is another country. Not the USA. Love that. You described everything very well. The imegary is good. The assassin groaned in pain ...

A bit random, but good. Just it doen't make sense. Sorry, but without a beginning, I'll have to say no, I didn't like this. Get a basic beginning. I see ...

Ha, this last line reminds me on Eminem. I mean, every time you here his name, he's fighting some guy. Not bad. A bit harsh,but I guess you did have ...

Real good imagery. That's what's important to me. I find that imagery brings any poem together. If you don't have,well, then you're pathetic, but this poem, is really good example ...