SofieR

Hey Eros! Sofie here, taking my first dive into your awesome novel :) Firstly, this idea/concept is so cool. Reminds me of The Host and Ender's Game, two of my ...

Very creative and well-written. Held my attention the entire time. Your style is so lyrical and poetic. There are a couple grammar mistakes, but I think if you do a ...

This was great! You get to the heart of what it's like to be a kid, just going through the motions in school. When you're writing through the P.O.V of ...

Firstly, great job on such a creative,unique idea. Formatting the story as a journal was a such a great move and makes you get to know the character on level ...

I love the Catcher in the Rye! I think you did a really good job staying true to the character and keeping his voice. Of course Holden would never truly ...

Beautifully written and a very touching story. If I were to give any suggestions for edits, it might be to show more and tell less. "She asks why." "My mind ...

I like this a lot. It's short, but sweet and I think everyone can relate to it on some level. "My name is your friend" is such a great line! ...

Nice job on this! There are a couple of spelling and typing errors. If you give it another re-read, I think you'll probably catch them all. The dialogue could flow ...

Good job on this! The writing is great and tugs right on the heart strings. "Happiness is a dying art" is a beautiful line. I kinda like that we don't ...

You've really got a great piece of writing on your hands here. I love the idea of this one object bringing three different generations together. It's also super interesting how, ...

Whoa, that ending took me my surprise! Kudos on that. This really is a great story starter, but a couple of edits can make it even better. 1) Be wary ...

Well done on writing such an honest piece. That's not easy to do. I can really tell you write straight from the heart. "Stream of consciousness" stories like this one, ...

Hey, here's a quickie review. First off, this whole story is just ADORABLE. It's so cute. The world could definitely use some more lighthearted,sweet stories centered around family like this ...

Solid work! There's a lot of really well-written lines in here. I especially like "-a valley where there should've been a mountain." Such a pretty line! The story could do ...

Very gripping. The characters and story both feel very real, if that makes sense? It could do with some edits. There are a couple of typos and some sentences that ...