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Good idea! :D *changes* And thank you so much! I'm glad you like the prologue (or whatever it's called) of the piece. :) I wrote that too. ;)

I think this one sentence could be better so instead of this: And so the queen touched their faces, and they fell to their knees and wept. This: And so ...

O_o Haha! Yay, you're so totally right! I usually don't catch those kinds of weird verbs at first until the tenth rereading. And finally do I reallize that I have ...

Well... she's obsessed with caps lock, if you couldn't tell, lol. And I think she means comparison as metaphors. So she uses them interchangably. I think... And yeah. The double ...

Still love it, Bob! :D

The teacher wrote this about it: He stood up and winked at me Before running in the night And the last thing I saw of him Was his tail holding ...

Snoink! I love this short piece. Yay! Thank you very much. It's my first historical fiction piece in like... five years. Eep. It's been too long. XD He wanted going ...

(I told you it wasn't THAT bad. ;))

The end looks too big. It's supposed to taper off into a whisper, but the font starts too big and stuff... maybe if I italicize it, it'll look smaller and ...

Hehehe... how much money do you get? ;)

No... this was my first attempt at using formatting like this.

I think this one sentence could be better so instead of this: And so the queen touched their faces, and they fell to their knees and wept. This: And so ...

Hahaha... but see! I'm not afraid of writing fiction, so that's why FREAK's so good. Poems are frankly very scary though, so *shivers* Okay. I'll try not to be afraid ...

No. Because I said describe the man, but I didn't say you have to visually describe the man. In fact, I would advise AGAINST describing the man visually. But you ...

Are they force-feeding him water? Because he's sweating and pissing WAY too much to be physically possible, if they were limiting his food and drink intake.