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Re: Industrial Visit Report.
THE VISIT: [Mr.Name], one of the senior-level employees at [comp.name] met us at the reception. We were instructed to follow their orders carefully and not to touch their heavy machinery ...
Apr 29, 2010 -
Re: Maharaj the Magician - 2 [edited]
Okay, so I was reading this again, just because it's an interesting problem! Anyway, this time I noticed this: It was easy to track. Mickey Mulligan, would-be bully, full-time idiot, ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: FREAK
LOL. Yeah... I cut out Chapter 1 and so Chapter 3 is now Chapter 2. It's much more streamlined! Sadie's 15! I think that's young, but then again, that was ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: Maharaj the Magician - 3
I reread this piece again! It's not bad, really, it's not! And it does give us a better sense of who our hero is and it gives us a concrete ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: Maharaj the Magician - 2 [edited]
Nah, lol. It's something to do with Nate changing the formats of the novels... it did some weird things to some of my stories too that I didn't space out! ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: The Werewolf of LA
This is five years old. *Locked*
Apr 16, 2010 -
Re: FREAK
All right, thanks! You're definitely right about the rawness... it is very new. It will be edited, so don't stress yourself too much about that.
Apr 16, 2010 -
Re: FREAK
Old version: Chapter 1 She had been sold? Over and over again, the freak repeated this to herself, still unwilling to believe it. Nobody wanted an older freak, nobody. They ...
Apr 15, 2010 -
Re: Maharaj the Magician - 3
Haha, no problem! ^_^ What if you hint at it? I mean, yes, it's under the surface, but it would probably surface out in other ways! I'm remembering this kid ...
Apr 13, 2010 -
Re: Carla
A kind of gritty, informal style. I've read things like what your style doesn't seem very firm or as strong as it could be yet because you're not quite getting ...
Apr 6, 2010 -
Re: Happiness! Rainbows! Furniture...?
Dam Beavery straight! :D
Apr 4, 2010 -
Re: Premonition- Nightmare Becomes Reality 2
LOL! No, it's a good thing! I like having opinions about characters... it makes them that much more real to me! It's when I don't really have any opinions on ...
Apr 4, 2010 -
Re: Premonition- Nightmare Becomes Reality
Hahaha, I knooooooow. Restarting stories is a pain! But as somebody who is currently rewriting her beginning, I can tell you that, as long as you have a direction of ...
Apr 4, 2010 -
Re: Mia: Bruised and Beaten
There are other ways to be unspecific. ^^ The groin area rarely hurts... and if it does, that's probably a really bad medical complication! What is more typical are the ...
Mar 14, 2010 -
Re: The Aliens Are Coming (a haiku)
This is awesome.
Mar 5, 2010