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Hey Carbon! This was an interesting letter, so yay for that! A couple of things... One thing I thought was a bit odd was the nature of this "spirit." As ...

Hey Rooh! :) What I liked about this poem was there was a really nice metaphor about the steep pathway and having to choose the path. This is a neat ...

Dun dun dunnnnnn! :o I like St. Rose! He seems to be the nicest man here. At first, I kind of liked Morton, but... well... he's not quite nice, is ...

Yay! No awkward turtles! :D Okay! So, I want to see how this continues, so I really, really hope that you're writing the next part! :) I'm kind of caught ...

I will let you know that I read this poem because I didn't want to get cursed! D: Anyway! This is a cute piece. The only problem is that it ...

The plot thickens! :o Okay, so first of all! I think the very last part of this chapter should be Alec and Ridley's conversation, just because the flow seems a ...

Ooers, actually I liked this quite a lot! The nameless one is strange and seems like a monster...I've been reading a lot of Greek myths, so I was reminded by ...

Okay, so I said that I would look at this later, but... well... I lied. :P Anyway! So, just general nitpicks! I think something should happen in between the part ...

Hi Dreamwalker! I kind of feel like the next chapter would be a better start of the story. The first few paragraphs were rambling at best. When she said, "But, ...

Hello again! :D I forgot to say this in my last critique, but I suppose I'll say it here! I really do like your writing style. It's very nice and ...

Hi Alex! Interesting set up you have here! I think it's interesting that he can take away souls and remain unseen. At first, I thought it was because he was ...

Ack, I kind of love this! I love Nate and Grace's relationship with him. Like, I really, really adore them together. I kind of wonder how they didn't work out ...

Hmmm... not sure if I like this shift. It doesn't sound quite right. I mean, you already mention that Lina has eating disorders, which implies that she looks sick, so ...

Just a few general comments! I kind of adore Lya. She is very perceptive about what her big sister is doing (d'awww) and very cute. Lina is kind of sad. ...

Hi! I edited your post so that it was in "story" mode instead of "normal" mode. That way, now you have paragraphs! So, hopefully you'll get more reviews other than, ...