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Yay for people understanding you and such! :D Anyway, one of the things that struck me for this poem (and there were several things!) was that it was not really ...

Maybe pride falling from the heart is a good thing! I find that pride makes us do a lot of stupid things that we, in a more sensible mind, would ...

Aww... a sad poem about unrequited love! :( One thing that I noticed about this poem is that there are a lot of I's in it. I mean, there are ...

Whooooops. I critiqued the wrong one. xD Anyway, now I am on the right one! And yes, it is tons better! Good job editing. :D Also, you're not that bad ...

Hey paulop! :D Okay, so basically the review that silverkey gave you was really, really good and you should follow all the grammar advice she gave you! It's really helpful. ...

Eli! I am going to bug you about this, because if I don't, who will?! Basically, you need to do spell check and check your grammar. Just glancing over it, ...

Hey RileyJ! :D Okay, so I was reading your poem, and I think that it might start off better with these lines: I sat on my porch, unable to bring ...

I love the first stanza! I was free-writing the other night at an obscenely late hour (and yes, it was an obscenely late hour!) and one of the things that ...

Haha, yay for boring first chapters mostly about the details? I don't think the blob is necessary at all, except for your own private notes. I mean, it's what we ...

Hi HaydenSmith! This reminds me of a story I wrote several years back, so I am a bit partial to the topic already! :) Okay... just a couple of things! ...

Hahaha! Awwww. This is a story of unrequited love, definitely! Poor paper... it's going to take more than glue to keep them together. I don't know about you, but when ...

Hi HaydenMacaw! :D Hmmm... I'm not sure whether I like this or hate this, so I am leaning towards like at the moment! The thing is, this is very, very ...

Hi PinkPanther! :D Okay, so I gather that this is a poem about you and a friend moving away? How sad! And you're right... it is a bit awkward to ...

Hi Vapor! Well, my first suggestion is to use a spell check. ;) You misspelled "briefly"! :o Hm, so this is a disease about eating disorders? Eek. I didn't see ...

Hey freewritersavvy! :D Hmm... I am not sure about this! It seems very... technical? This may just be me, but when I write, the last things that come to mind ...