God Loves You

Hey! It is a beautiful poem. Such a lovely and true message it delivers- God loves you. The writing is simple yet strong. The lines "And enough to break you, so you can fully know His love.
For if you were never broken, you would never
Reach for Him." are my favorite. Also, "He will never force your love--But He wants it so badly." Lovely. Just lovely.
This poem instills in the readers a sense of love and gratitude towards God and is so very inspiring. You know that He is always there, watching you, guiding you, looking out for you. At times we may not feel like it, but He does cares.
Great work!

GAAAAAH!

God loves you-- Enough to catch you when you fall
Enough to discipline you when you're wrong
Enough to test you to make you strong
And enough to break you, so you can fully know His love.
For if you were never broken, you would never
Reach for Him.

animekaratepup wrote:I'm not trying to be preachy, honest. This is my heart. Well, God's heart, I think. But it needs critiques too, so... hammer away. :3

Now that I look at it, it needs a bit of help.

No matter who you are, what you believe, what you do or what you did.. God loves you..
What an inspiring work. I liked it! Keep it up...

I like this poem! It shows the truth about God (I believe every word of the poem). I found a few mistakes, but decided to let it slide. It was a beautiful poem, keep writing more!

I likes the poem and the message was just beautiful the only problem is probably the ending. The ending was too short and didn't fit the rest of the poem.But overall, the poem was simply beautiful!

Great job. I'm a really devout christian and I felt the depth of your words, and I can say I believe every little bit is true. The first stanza was amazing but it sort of tapered off from there, it was still quality work, but not as good as those first lines.
Perfection:

God loves you-- Enough to catch you when you fall
Enough to discipline you when you're wrong
Enough to test you to make you strong
And enough to break you, so you can fully know His love.
For if you were never broken, you would never
Reach for Him.

I love the first stanza! I was free-writing the other night at an obscenely late hour (and yes, it was an obscenely late hour!) and one of the things that came out was through suffering came sacrifice and through sacrifice came love. Because it is only through suffering where these difficult choices -- such as right versus wrong, love versus hate, etc. -- come up and often the right choice is the one which is most difficult to make and so, in order to submit yourself to the truth, then you would have to suffer and sacrifice what is easy for what is hard -- but right. And, through these sacrifices, it gives you a much heightened level of what is important, because if there is no love done in any sacrifice, it is a miserable affair, but if there is love and truth in the sacrifice, it is always worthwhile.

Anyway, that's my two cents, lol.

My biggest problem with this poem (you know there had to be a critique, lol!) was that these are relatively simple ideas that can be much more expanded into something better. So, for instance, every stanza can be fleshed out into its own poem... and it would be better that way too.

But good start!

I'm glad you have such strong faith! It wasn't preachy at all, it was beautiful. Your imagery, flow, pacing, was all flawless. I'll say it again, its an absolutley beautiful poem. Also you show a very strong voice.

The only thing I would critique is the last line, it didn't quite seem to fit with the rest of the poem. It was sort of a shift in subject matter, and the language didn't seem to match up with the rest.

I really, really loved this poem. It has been done before, but it is the type of poem that never get old. Great poem!

(P.S. I totally write poems on my desks at school...in pencil--they're erasable )

*Hitting love....stinkers I guess I will have to settle for like*

I really liked the honesty of this poem! It gives a true and heartfelt message.

Keep it up,
~FW~

I love this poem. Not only does it have feeling, but truth and insight to the REAL God, the one that does not just love you, that loves you enough to discipline you when you turn away. Imagery could have been a bit better, as well as diction, but the poem flowed fairly well.

God loves you-- Enough to catch you when you fall
Enough to discipline you when you're wrong
Enough to test you to make you strong
And #FF0000 ">enough to break you, so you can fully know His love.
For if you were never broken, you would never
#FF0000 ">Reach out to Him. This last line just seems too short compared to the rest of the stanza, so it disrupts the flow.

He is a radical God.
#FF0000 ">He will never forsake you, but He's waiting,
Waiting for you to reach for Him. This format flows better in my opinion.
He is a gentleman. He will never force your love--
But He wants it so badly. So true

#FF0000 ">He will do things that blow your mind
And make you wonder why. Original did not flow at all.
Because you don't understand.
How can you?
He doesn't think like anyone else. True, but maybe you could have ended the poem differently, this sounds like something you would put in the muddle of it.