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So! First of all, you are going to want to use spell check on this. There are a lot of spelling errors that can be easily found with spell check. ...

¡Oy vey! Solv, I love you, but I worry about your English essays! :P Knowledge is one of the most important things in life; it's the key for humans to ...

Hey sassycat! I realize that you probably had limitations from the contest and everything, but reading this with no context as to what this contest was, I have absolutely no ...

Hey Wolfdra! :) Maybe the reason why you have writer's block is because you don't really care to go further in your stories? I mean, I read your story and ...

Hahaha. This story, actually, is a perfect example of Mary Sue/Gary Stu syndrome. I am going to have to quote this for future critiques of mine! After all, sometimes this ...

You're a star! Anyway, a grammatical nitpick: "...say her daughter won’t be going out alone any more."

Hi Kattie! :) A couple things struck me when I was reading your poem! For one, there is a mention of love and losing someone through disinterest (or at least ...

This story is so sad! :( A couple of things... I think you could have drawn out this story a lot more. It seemed really quick and rushed through... not ...

Haha! I love the author commentary. I wish you had more of it and that you didn't hide it away. It was really one of the funniest parts of the ...

Aw, these poems are so cute! I prefer the second one, just because it pretty much oozes tranquility. And, in a philosophical sense, it's more interesting as well. After all... ...

Remember is right! I have a reputation of not liking adverbs. xD Anyway, this was really cute! I like the weird stories that the father/daughter team made up. My dad ...

Aww! I hope he defeats the illness! I love how you made the poem start with the grim and end with the hopeful. As far as the last stanza? Well... ...

Haha! What a fun read. :) One thing that I kind of wondered about was why Johnnie had a scythe at all... maybe for appearances? I'm asking because originally it ...

MWHAHA! First! :D Anyway! Yup. Emma can't die this soon so they are simply curing Beth and Emma is getting in the way. Why, oh why, they didn't actually knock ...

and briskly walks away. I would get rid of the adjective here! Along the edges are cheap foldable chairs. Cheap, foldable chairs remind me of those dinky plastic ones used ...