Snoink

I don't know... it seems like your trying to force in all these big sounding words when some smaller ones would do just fine. Especially thE word "recipient." I don't ...

Well... it's not much to comment on, but there were several spelling errors. My finger was really hurting the other day, so I can understand completely if you typed too ...

The first part is awesome! But then the last couple of lines seem to lose the attractiveness of the former lines. Although you are losing momentum... Hmmm... :?

Pretty good! I like it. Even so, I'm going to point out all the tyops. I thought I was useless, that I didn't eserve any better. Well, now I know ...

Nice! :) Simple, poetic... just the way I like it! However, these lines: My body sweats From the warm glow Of your love for me Of your eyes Brown eyes ...

Er... poetically, it's nice. But there's one line that the essayist in me is screaming about. "and a chorus that impounds your heart - move your feet" It changes tenses! ...

Okay, I've looked it over. I'm not going to bother you with all the grammar mistakes, but I will tell you this. You have a lot of comma splices or ...

GRAMMAR I know what you're thinking now. "I have this story that needs help, and the first thing that Snoink is paying attention to is the grammar before she even ...

I think I saw this on Flax! But I noticed a couple of things now... Okay, in the first paragraph you have "adjective, adjective" and then continue with the story. ...

I'M BACK! *giggles madly* First of all, before I begin, I have a confession to make. I am a perfectionist in all the wrong places. I remember writing dozens and ...

Oooo! I liked this a lot. And that's saying something. Usually I hate romances. :oops: But this is an exception. A strong female character? An arranged marriage? A father who ...

It's this part that seems a little strange, mostly because it differs from the rest of the poem: hind-sight has nothing on the first shock of despair like they kicked ...

The grammar of this sentence is driving me crazy: I feel like I’m drunk; my mind reeling and never settling on a single thought, head aching like hell and feeling ...

Copy and paste this and then put it in your original entry. First Trouble Then Comes Trouble or Syndicated Theatre By Matthew We were on the ground level, the street. ...

Augh...after putting it off for so long I finished reading it today. 'Twas all right...but I totally went into Critique Mode after I spotted four typos in the first two ...