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Hi, there High Top! SlushySlapped here to review! I'd love do a line by line, but I know I won't have enough time for that. I'm just going to give ...

Hi, there! SlushySlapped here to review, as promised! So, poetry really isn't my thing, but I'm going to give you the best feedback I can... I really liked this! Especially ...

Hey, there! SlushySlapped here to review your story! I'm just going to jump right into critiquing. "Cass! Time for school!" I heard my mom call from downstairs. I rolled my ...

Hi, there! SlushySlapped here to review your story! I didn't find any grammar/punctuation errors, so good job on that! I am very nit-picky about those. This short story stood out ...

Hi, there! Slushy Slapped here to review! I'm gonna start with grammar and punctuation and such. Because that's just how I do things. :) A comma is needed after Michael. ...

Hi!! I'm going to start off a suggestion: I think that the anymore in this sentence makes it a bit awkward. I think it might sound better if it was ...

HELLO ROSIE-KINS! (I'm stealing this because it's much better than Writer-Face. Unless you prefer to be called Writer-Face... then I shall call you Writer-Face.) You already kind of know how ...

Hi! SlushySlapped here to review your poem! I probably say this a lot in my reviews, but I am a punctuation/typo freak. You did really well with it, but here ...

Hi there! SlushySlapped here to review your poem! My first thought after reading this poem was wishing it had more emotion. Maybe it's just me, but this is a poem ...

Hi! SlushySlapped, here to review! I'm going to start off with grammar/punctuation/suggestions, because I always do! You're going to need a space after that period and a space after the ...

Hi, SlushySlapped here to review your story! I shall start with some suggestions/editing. Sorry in advance for my nitpicking. I think that this could be split into two sentences. I ...

Hi! SlushySlapped here to review. From the prologue to this chapter, so far I love it! It drew me right in. This is a really interesting story. I really love ...

Hi! SlushySlapped here to review! This was so good! But first, I shall edit! I think 'and' is unnecessary. "When I got home, Charlie was waiting." This 'and' too. "I ...

Hi! SlushySlapped, here to review your poem. I really liked this. Poetry really isn't my thing. So, I'm not really sure about punctuation and stuff. But, I'm going to give ...

Hi! I'm going to start off with grammar and such, just to get it out of the way. Sorry in advance for picking this apart! "People think that the world ...