SkyeDreamer

I haven't edited on here yet, but I am going back into my novel and redoing a few parts, per your tips. :) Thank you so much! And I will ...

Sorry, don't know what happened there with the odd symbols.

Aaah! Why did the blue not show up? Oh well, sorry about that... hopefully it won't be too confusing...

I got in! Thank you for all the reviews! :)

Okay, you are just really good. Your imagery is great, the work is good... never stop writing!

I didn't mind the long sentences; in fact, it gave the whole poem a waltzy, rolling feel in my opinion. I really liked this!

There is nothing left I can say, except that this was incredible. I loved it!!

Usually I don't read comedies but this was hilarious! I'll do a better reply with part two. See you there!

Aww, I loved this! I really liked the idea that you had everything dear to you in one box, then you ended with the Bible... As a fellow Christian, I ...

Just read part 2, so nevermind my last comment! I love it!!

I loved this!!! Okay, only one thing. Maybe you should change the ending, to her new child is Jake's daughter. That would be so cute! Just wanted to say that. ...

Thanks for the reviews! It was intentional, so I'm glad it kind of worked.

Oh! I just reread this. This is actually not at all confusing; I just must not have been reading carefully. This is really good! It's stronger than I gave it ...

Well, this is a late review, but just wanted to say that this is good! It is punchy, like others have said, and I could definitely get the meaning. So... ...

I'm glad people mentioned the ninja thing, because I was unsure of it too. I wasn't sure what other word to put to convey the meaning, but I'll keep thinking. ...