SisterItaly

Kay, nitpicks! "I'm Aslan." he smiled... Should be a capital 'H' here. "Cedric." the other boy nodded back. This should be "Cedric," the other boy nodded back. Gah, Cedric thought. ...

I’m Emaly, and I suck at review introductions. Let’s get on with this shall we? Nit picks: when I was a kid... Always start a sentence with a capital letter. ...

I’m Emaly, and I suck at review introductions. Let’s just get down to it, shall we? Nit picks: DON’T GIVE US SUMMER PROJECTS. Capital letters should only be used at ...

I am so offended how could you I will never forgive this ever you evil person. Just kiddin' I laughed, a lot. Reminds me of a poem I wrote, 'P.E.M.B.A.S.' ...

Let's skip the friendly introductions and get on with the review, shall we? Nitpicks “D’you think it’ll be enough?” “No.” “I don’t know what I’ll do if something goes wrong.” ...

Okay, lets make the introduction quick. I'm Emaly and I'll be reviewing your work for today. From a first glance it looks alright, now let's get into this. Reading on, ...

Hey, I'm THE Puzzler, and I'll be your reviewer for today. Before we even start... Whoa. Huge block of text. I almost didn't want to review it because it would ...

Hey, let's skip the introduction and get right to the review, shall we? Alright, a comedy. Everyone likes a good laugh. However I haven't begun nit-picking yet, my impression may ...

Hey, I'm Puzzle, I'll be your reviewer for today. I'm not a big fan of fanfiction... but here goes nothing. "Alright. I'll be back soon. Do you think you two ...

Hey, I'm Emaly, I'll be your reviewer for today. -Insert deep breath here-. We start off on a good note, I don't see any spelling mistakes. Well, besides my own ...

hands on hips, shaking his head. ...hips and shaking.... The comma drags the sentence on. “You were kind of eager in there.” He said, scowling. Whoa, what? Eager in where? ...

James culist I'm going to take it Culist is a last name. In that case, it should have a capital C 5feet 5 inches and 82 pounds. He was an ...

I'm Emaly. I'm reviewing you. Let's cut to the chase shall we? First of all. Lots of love for the lack of spelling errors. Seeing no little red squiggly lines ...

AHH! Chunky! Space out your writing a little better. I liked it though, I really did. But instead you walked alone, so that it all became me. I should have ...

Ouch, the red writing hurts the eyes! But I see what you did there, there are other ways to show different points of view, and dramatic is supposed to be ...