SirenCymbaline

My favourite character is probably Hughes now, just for his inner monologue about martyrdom. It's refreshing to see differing opinions on a main theme between your main characters. I like ...

My earlier sentiments about the way you write action still hold up, so I'll try not to repeat myself there. You did well at establishing a sense of urgency. I ...

I'lll get the technical stuff out of the way first, it's a bit text-wall-y, and it was a bit hard for me to read until I got used to it. ...

I found this to be pretty effective. The fighting was nice and swift, no fluff, and most of the time it was easy to understand who was doing what to ...

This was a fun little story. It did actually feel kinda like watching an episode of Sonic X. I'll get the annoying nitpicks out of the way early. One, 'blue ...

I'll get the technical stuff out of the way first, as that part is the least interesting. You mostly paint a pretty clear scene, but the head-hopping between Robert and ...

Okay, full disclosure: I like this a lot. It's got a sweet quirky feeling to it that gets to me. Especially the 'and then I fucking died' bits. They're a ...

Sorry, this is gonna be a short one. My feelings on this piece don't need a lot of explaining, and I'm sure you've had enough feedback on the technical stuff. ...

This is a promising story that you clearly put effort into the planning of, but there's a lot that's getting in the way of my understanding it. Firstly, I'm very, ...

Looks like I'm on mostly critique mode, so I'm just gonna get all the critiquey things out of my system at the beginning, and say nice things at the end. ...

This did make me think about something I hadn't thought of before. These are some good, currently relevant reasons to learn Mandarin. I didn't actually notice this was satire until ...

Hi there. You got a strong start, but there's a few holes that kind of hold this story back a bit. 'Sometimes she wished she was the daughter of somebody ...

I was really confused reading this. It was only on my third reading that I figured out what was going on, and I'm still not entirely sure that I know. ...

Hello. Just a disclaimer, I am not familiar with Young Justice, so I will be judging this as a piece of writing on it's own, and not touch on things ...

Hello. I like this. I like the way this man thinks, how he just needs to point out illogical statements where he finds them, he has to make sense of ...