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Re: Worst Day of my Life
Good job. Feedback. I liked the way you used the words ‘ravenous’ and ‘esurience’ to describe the character’s hunger. Also, great work making Taco Bell sound evil by making their ...
Feb 13, 2018 -
Re: What We Want Prolouge
Errors: "Elena can you describe yourself in one word?" should have a comma after the word Elena. When you say "I don't know for certain but it would have changed." ...
Feb 9, 2018 -
Re: Chrys and Shujaa Reunited
Good job on this story! I liked the descriptive words that you used, like when you said "The Bai Jian morning sunrise dashed the sky bright red and orange. The ...
Feb 1, 2018 -
Re: Lost - Prologue (Improved) and Chapter 1.A
Hi, me again. Epilogue I like the conflict going on between the him and the voice in his head. I think you do a good job of making him and ...
Jan 30, 2018