Sinkingtooslow

Is this your rebuttal to the anti-fireworks poem we had a few days ago? Well, I don't really fancy it too much, but I suppose you do have a talent ...

I disagree. I don't think a different hook is needed at all. I think the story is wonderful as it is. It doesn't seem amateur in anyway to me, it ...

Thank you for you comments and thanks for reading my poem. Don't worry if you didn't like it. :)

Thanks for the advice, but no thanks. I'm not "justifying" my work, I like my work, and I'm always open to advice for my poems, but I reserve the right ...

Sorry you didn't like it, but I won't be revising this poem anymore. It is as it should be. It reflects a specific incident, but it is rather vague (it's ...

Um, wow, I didn't think it rhymed at all... does it? It was a haiku that I wrote in the middle of Lit class because we were talking about Haikus.... ...

This is wonderful! I don't think the rhythm is off much at all really. At least it sounds perfect to me. But I am terrible with that sort of thing. ...

Thanks for your review, Sapphire, I do appreciate it. You didn't interpret it too badly. It's a complicated story where neither person is exactly innocent. I feel the line with ...

Very enjoyable, it flowed very nicely. Sounds very sad but soft. The sea churned and pitched, the wind howled, but he never twitched. That was a great beginning.

Interesting perspective and well put together. I enjoyed it. Reminds me of how some of the little kids I know that don't believe me when I tell them about cassette ...