Silberfee

hey. yes I have actually revised the poem, this was actually a first draft and the trouble is I never actually know when it is ok enough to publish the ...

thanks for the suggestions what you say is valid I'll think about revising it :)

ah ok ignore me then :P

Thank you so much!! I didn't know that was what 'click here to set options for this work' is for

I was thinking of deleting chapter one because it's a bit slow. In chapter one I was trying to convey the idea of someone whose only companion is his mother ...

thanks for the review ! I'll take all this into account when editing :)

thanks for the review I'm still not sure how to develop the plot yet so I might change the first chapter (while taking on board your suggestion) I agree with ...

So glad that my review was helpful and I'll do my best to keep an eye out for your next chapters !!

Sorry its partly my fault I didn't read the title !! so stupid of me ....if I read the title I might have picked up on the crap thing . ...

yeah I wasn't sure what category to put it in, next time I write something like this i'll categorise it as a story !

Before I wrote this poem I did look at the reasons why young children (primary school age ) choose professions and they choose it for very simple reasons. For example ...

Hi! thanks for the review, around the period I wrote this I wanted to have a go at writing a children's poem but I didn't really know how to start. ...

I wanted to experiment with just showing and not telling that's why I didn't include much or any sensory imagery ... but thanks for the review !

ah ok that must have been me overanalysing then ! sorry

Yes I'm currently confused about the fine line between poetry and stories :P I used to think poetry's main characteristic is rhythm but now I'm not sure! thank you for ...