ShortBus

I thought this was a really good short story. There is room for improvement, but there always is. I'm not going to point out all the grammar mistakes, and the ...

I think this is pretty good. I really don't understand it entirely though. The other commenters mentioned how this isn't very sexual. You must of put that in a description ...

Well... this was all over the place. It seems as if you just sat down and started writing. It is pretty disorienting because there is no structure at all. The ...

Pretty good. I think you could of been a bit more descriptive. You really can't get a solid visual without getting deep into the surrounding. Everything is kind of generic. ...

That was really good. I don't know anything about peoms, but that was a great story. It was very well explained. Most of the poems I've read have some underlying ...

Hey there. I'm no expert on peotry, I actually know nothing about it. I am however trying to understand it. I like the way you express the story. It is ...

Good job with the visualization. The flow of the poem worked well also. I really can't comment on the structure of your poem. I'm not sure if there even is ...

You have a great perspective on things. Even though this was unstructured, it was written quite well. The writing style is brilliant, but it looks like you can elaborate immensely. ...

“Come on Reeve, just blow the candles!” “Do you think looking at the cake will produce anything good?” “Just make a wish and blow the candles or we’ll all die ...