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Well done! It definitely sounds good. This was good with some errors like: Take me home Mother, take me home I would have preferred the comma after the first lines ...

Hey a long poem written by B'journ! Pretty good.Actually I read it in a hurry and didn't get much to critic on,hehehe... So I'll come on later and critic on ...

Preety good. It does show ur inner feelings. Worked well but I didn't like the reapitation of the last line three times,I know it does emphasis but still didn't sound ...

Well done! "T smiled at me. “Don’t worry, you’ll get the hang of it soon enough.” Is that T for Toki? Using only T was a bit annoying. In all ...

Yeah do u actually know what it means...'ahem ahem.' Spelling of opportunities is wrong.(oh I guess Gazza has already pointed out.) Though a bit funny but totally confusing. :)

A nice and soothing poem. U can feel the strong emotions of the tree in the poem.Well done! And is that tree hand drawn?Its always nice to see pictures related ...

Good. But "as the i feel in this way" :? :? ,'the I feel'??Isn't there an extra the before I.

My God!!! *sobs* This is truly the bestest story ever. :lol: May I ask u from what did u get the inspiration of writing such a powerful,emotional story. Man this ...

This was wonderful. I liked the following lines: “ And even when I am lost and there is nothing in this world you will give me hope. And my voice ...

I can't think of any other comment than to say good work because it is a good work. :) There are a few grammatical and spelling errors. Like u added ...

I would love to here this sung by anyone :lol: I liked the first stanza.Good job :) .And yeah u can post more songs. -sayani :wink:

First of all Welcome to yws! :) Your poem is a good work.But as shimmer says there is no need of commas after each sentence.Keep up the good work.And keep ...

Welcome to yws! :D Bet you will have fun here. :) The poem is not that bad.Good seems you are very much satisfied with your work,so am I with your ...

A NICE RELIGIOUS POEM.Though the two lines "So my friend eternal I give my life to thee"and the line "So Jesus my friend eternal I'll love and serve you eternally" ...

First of all WELCOME TO YWS!!,after all you are a new member. :) This story was a good try,but some little spelling errors are there.I liked the ending part too. ...