Shine

Swottielottie wrote: Who likes this? answer:ME,c'mon no one will hate it. :) This version is really good. Keep writing. :) -Ani

Patrick wrote: My first and rubbish attempt hope to write better soon I hope to see it soon. BANG... life is gone. hehehehehe.. :lol: I only liked this line. Keep ...

I just loved the first three lines: "When a leaf touches another, And a flower listens to the wind, Passion breaks between the trees" Well done. The second para was ...

Never in a million years, Could I regain your trust. Never in a single day, Could I do the things I must. Never in a legacy, Could I take back ...

This was really good. my favorite line would be: Your friends surround you and this is it: your life only stretches as far as the night. a spelling error that’s: ...

Hey this was really good; the flow of the poem was good. My points of view: There is no end to something that had no beginning-- no foreseeable conclusion for ...

This was pretty random. I liked the use of if only ... if only , but I felt the ending with With the thought of his father and the thought ...

This was good indeed :) umm.. u say it a free write I don’t think so. :o look you - the earth reaches for the sky like spurned lover for ...

First of all well written, and well explained. This was no wonder written with all ur inner feelings. A question: Why is it “Observation from the Back Stair”. Cicero wrote:Yes, ...

Well done! 701 yr in Paris great! Sharty, gleaming Sharty Pride of the poets past Oh, how your smile does glow! Nice starting. And every starting letters of every sentence ...

I liked this poem very much, though its short but in these few lines the poems feelings worked well. I may call it short and sweet. :) put your ear ...

Wow this was really good.A lovely piece of work. dripping across the pages of your soul infested letters to casanova the flow of the poem is good but as pointed ...

Preety good but it lacks a definite flow u see. "She pushes him down oh he's right where she wants him Oh let's get this over with pullin' out and ...

Hey Welcome to YWS. :) This piece of work was good. After all of the girls were cleaned up, two men came around tossing them there daily ration of bread, ...

Definitely a well thought of a funny story, Then the man stepped over the Mayor and took his place in front of the podium. The man's name was Tony, but ...