Shearwater

Hi Isha, it's Pink! Here to review, hope you don't mind ;) So I'm going to nitpick first and then get on with my overall thoughts on the piece. Nitpicks ...

Hi Ren, Pink here as promised :3 So, I noticed quite a bit of typos and mistakes that I'd to point out so bare with me. Also, I haven't read ...

Hi Violet! Pink here, as requested ;) So, first of all, I'd like to say you did a fairly good job, considering what the crazy plot generator gave you. I ...

Hiya Georgie! Pink here, and welcome to YWS! *dances* So, I'm going to be reviewing this piece for you today and I'd like to start of with a bit of ...

Hi, Pink here :) So, I also agree with what SilentRain suggested, I mean it would have been easier to read if your stanzas were separate. I did think your ...

Hiya, Pink here :) So, I actually found what you meant by using the apple as her thought on skipping class, I find myself in the same situation sometimes. Like, ...

Hey Writerchick, Pink here! Nitpicks It was raining the day my mother disappeared and the same day I would Are you saying she's going to disappear on the same day ...

Hi Kylan, Pink here :) Red tangents of blood that glisten like an old radio song from better times. The blood is black, she is stirred Alright, so I'm a ...

Hiya! Pink here :) So I know this is just the introduction so I'm going to evaluate you on just that. Now, I do agree that this intro was little ...

Hi Jai! Pink here :) Nitpicks A ding. . . ding. . . ding . . became DING-DING-DING, I think you should have described the ding becoming louder instead of ...

Hey Carli :) So I just finished reading this and I think it's the best chapter yet. I mean, there was so much progression and emotion mixed into here and ...

Hiya, Pink here :) Characters This is quite short so I didn't get to get a very deep glance at your characters but you still provided enough description and knowledge ...

Hi! Pink here :) So, I'm going to nitpick a little before I get on with the whole review so bare with me, please :3 “I must been admitted into ...

Hi Blackbird! Pink here :) I saw this was featured and decided to check it out and I'm glad I did. This was so strong and emotional, it gave me ...

Hi there! Pink here, as requested ;) So I don't have many nitpicks, those have already been picked out so I don't really have much to address. Now, with that ...