Shallowdepth

Wow, for a first attempt at poetry I say you pass with flying colors! My first attempt wasn't quite as good as yours that's for sure lol. Not the greatest ...

This was a very nice poem, reminded me of dreams I had as a child, which I suppose may have been the point lol. I love your usage of vocabulary ...

Wow this was a great poem, very powerful. I love the structure of it as well as the vivid imagery. Combining the two elements all but accentuates the the words ...

Very simple yet so true. When you wrote I think, though correct me if I'm wrong, you were at that tranistioning age when one grows into young adulthood. And sadly, ...

I really liked this poem, and the last stanza was my favorite of all because that's totally how I wish I could be >< . A real underlying theme in ...

It's every girl's dream isn't it? A deep, unshakable love ^^ this poem made me smile. Very beautiful, and a little sad at the end. I like the ending, though. ...

I LOVE the structure of this poem, the random lines, the segments. Great way to do it. Lol that makes me what to try and write something like that =) ...

Me likey a lot =) the only thing is there are a few typos that you might want to fix up real quick so other people don't pester you about ...

Nice job ^^ i wish I could write haikus like that, but everytime I try it, well, it looks more like a machine forcily crammed words into a stanza lol. ...

Whoo-hoo! Right on sister! That was excellent! lol I loved it ^^ Really if anyone has anything bad to say about this it's either because the structure, which is fine ...

I don't know what those other people are talking about, this poem is really good. And as far as the whole pointless thing goes, who said you had to write ...

Wow, that was really good, and very accurate. It's definatly what you see when you look around at the shallow people that surround you in today's society, at least that's ...

I like this poem a lot, especially the rhyme which I think a lot of people over look or discredit nowadays. It's also very interesting how you bring to concepts ...

This is a very interesting poem. Some parts are a little abstract, which isn't a bad thing, but overall it's pretty good =) Not too bad for a fourteen-year-old. The ...

I like the setting, it reminds me of the property we lived on when I was a kid ^^ . I think what might add to the poem if maybe ...