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Cool, thanks for the advice stelagineva XD

Haha!!! Really funny! Write more! :P

Hey angelwings13, thanks for pointing those out - I'm usually a grammar fanatic so I'm surprised I didn't notice those! Anyway thanks a lot for your comment! :P

Hey, I think your writing is really good here! some great images being conjured up. Well done :P

Hey people, Yeah i know it's random and the "I" thing gets annoying after a while, but that's how the poem is meant to be structured, so.. Thanks for the ...

Awesome, loved it! very creative and interesting. i found myself conjuring up entertaining images of the characters actually rapping these! :P

LOL awesome!! its about time sum1 put down twilight!!!

Hey, i know you've gotten some crticism but overall i liked the topic and where you were going with this poem. well done :)

Awesome! cool poem, it kind of reminded me of a riddle, even though you knew what the answer was from the start. Cool topic too!

Hey, great prologue! well written with great description. i reckon u shud keep writing and make it a novel! :P

well i don't have any long-winded suggestions of advice, i just thought it was a cool poem :P

I agree with most of what CreativeFreak said, but overall i liked how u had such a sudden ending, it made me want to go back and read it all ...

Haha thanx people, well yes i do have quite a dark twisted mind so u can see where this is coming from........

Hey, great poem! I really liked your theme as I myself am a fan of Greek mythology and have always found that particular myth fascinating :)

Hi ZLYF, thanks for your advice, i shall take that into consideration :)