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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Other Re: The Beginning of the Future

    You're very welcome! Wow, it's a story-seption, flashback over flashback XD That sounds really interesting though, it makes the plot look that much bigger to me

    Aug 12, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Literature Re: The Man, The Wanderer And The Child

    Hi! Thank you very much for reviewing, it helped a lot. I will keep in mind what you said, and perhaps I shall publish an edited, longer, version eventually. Thank ...

    Aug 12, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Literature Re: The Man, The Wanderer And The Child

    Hi! Thanks for pointing those mistakes out, I've fixed them. Thank you for taking the time to review, have a nice day!

    Aug 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Narrative, Fantasy Re: Sun Seeker

    Glad I could help ;)

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Technology Re: Dystopia: Impetus

    Yeah, when I first started writing stories I never re-read them and posted without checking, but it helps a lot to find simple errors and maybe you get new ideas ...

    Aug 1, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: And No One There Saw Him Cry

    ah yes, the only thing I didn't change is "and then the clicking began to break the silence", as it's only the clicks the guns make once loaded, but it ...

    Jul 28, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: And No One There Saw Him Cry

    I'm glad you liked it :D I fixed what you found, thanks for the help, and thanks for reading!

    Jul 28, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: And No One There Saw Him Cry

    Thank you very much for the review, I really appreciate it, and I'm happy you enjoyed my story. I fixed the grammar problems you found, and changed the sentence where ...

    Jul 28, 2014
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Bruise-Blue

    Hey! This is truly amazing and interesting. The dialogs were fantastic, I liked the ending very much, very good cliffhanger, very emotional, and when i read it again it was ...

    Jul 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Guardianship Ch.1: The Girl Who Held Darkness

    Hi! (Extremely late reply, sorry). Thank you very much for reviewing! I corrected all of the mistakes you pointed out, except for one: substituting his with its when referring to ...

    Jan 25, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Guardianship Prologue: The Throne

    Hi! Thanks for reading and reviewing! I fixed all the grammar errors you found, and I'll try to fix this so it won't be as confusing. Oh, and the first ...

    Jan 10, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Guardianship Prologue: The Throne

    Hi! I must say this is probably the best review I have received so far, it really helps. Thank you for taking the time to read, I'm glad you liked ...

    Jan 4, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Guardianship Ch.1: The Girl Who Held Darkness

    Ah, yes. The details about the Souls and Guardianships will come along in the next chapter. Also, this is the first chapter, but there is a prologue before it. Would ...

    Jan 4, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Guardianship Ch.1: The Girl Who Held Darkness

    Hi! Thanks for the review, it really helps. I read the story again and I found and fixed may grammatical errors, I'll edit it to fix what you pointed out ...

    Jan 4, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Guardianship Ch.1: The Girl Who Held Darkness

    Hi! Thank you for taking the time to read! ok, then: Point.1 Yeah, I have a problem with spelling, I tried my best, but I'll read it again to find ...

    Jan 4, 2014


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