Sassykat

I thought this was very interesting. It was a little vague, but perhaps this only adds to the, maybe, woozy sensation of a girl who just had her heart broken? ...

I thought this one was kind of interesting, the way you used a rhythm, but never rhymed. I thought it was beautiful, and I loved it. I think you could ...

Okay. I just have to say that this was BEAUTIFUL. I literally almost cried. I loved it. And I couldn't even find anything wrong...though that could just be that I ...

A dagger pierces, a shout echoes. Clinging on, yet soon panicked into letting go. No reason remaining to stay, like a feather drifting threw through the atmosphere. No haven to ...

Oh. My. Gosh. This was amazing. Okay, first I noticed that your line with the rock-hard, diamond core. If it's diamond, it is harder than a rock, don't you think? ...

The gasping shriek bounces off my skull. This line just sounds weird. If your are gasping, you are inhaling strangely, and if you are shrieking, you are exhaling weirdly. You ...

First thing before reading this is to say that there is a forum for lyrics. Why has caused you to do this to your friends For this line you should ...

This was an interesting one. Are you referring to birth, or something else, by chance? Also, I think that your line "with marras joking long" needs to be 'along,' and ...

Okay, this was pretty cool. I just have a few questions: why is this person being pushed down the abyss, if indeed that's what it is? "Body forced downwards" doesn't ...

This has some fixing up to do, for sure. I feel like you should mention your metaphorical roller coaster before you say the griffon is diving down the 'tracks,' just ...

Okay, this is my new favorite. I love music. So, when asked it I would like to be A member of the band, That first line there didn't seem to ...

This is really interesting, it has a really different feel to it. Maybe some of that is because it's an English assignment, but it's still really good. Stepping and dancing, ...

I liked this, but kind of had trouble understanding it. This is just an opinion, but in this line "It’s gonna be okay." You might change the gonna into going ...

Wow. That's the first thing that popped into my head when I finished this one. Wow. However, there are some mistakes. I only noticed a couple. A shade I am, ...

This was a really interesting poem. I liked it. The message is not unique, but expressed in a unique way. I notice that you suddenly change about for lines into ...