Samara1carter

I love the amount of detail that you put in here. I really really really like it. I hope that there will be more of it soon in the future. ...

Okay this is looking good so far... You have a lot to go though, I didn't see many grammar errors thankfully just a few like "Prolog" and "Gose". I just ...

This looks really good--- I can't wait to see what you will add next. Really I can not. But there are some problems, you need to add more detail. It ...

I like the way that you formatted this but I think that you could have done a little bit better on the formatting I know it can be hard I ...

This Really is a strong poem, And I do have to note that you are really good at making them. Okay onto the opinions :p.... I can see where you ...

I can see where your going with the story And I can say that it needs a Little work It would be better than cursing would be complementing like crazy ...

You did a fabulous job there are a few errors but past that you are doing hunky-dory. I would also have to mention unless you have much much more of ...

This story is fabulous I think that you should make more to go along like short adventures you'll be perfect for short stories or novels by third person. Another thing ...

If I were that girl I would defiantly say yes but I'm not so It absorbs. I love how you put your heart in it, it makes me smile because ...

I have deep feelings towards this one, I can have the same feelings. I think you should leave it just like it is right there. Its a great poem One ...

Her Crimson Napkin is very deep, I can see that your talking about either the one person killed her or the dying flesh of the other as in the heart ...

I have some advise for you to use. One indent when ever you are starting a new paragraph or new subject. This helps if your trying to help the readier ...

It makes me sorrowful the meaning is deep and packed enough to move the soul. Good job.