Sam

Mooooooore...NOW! I command thee!

Ohh, and Jack [especially if your readers are history geeks and are up on 18th century slang], the Half-Cocked Boy could be interpreted maaaaany different ways.

It's awesome...man, I loved the allusion to the hourglass...for obvious reasons, o'course. The first half was a bit bland, but I think the whole thing would be best left as ...

Ooh, see, I loved Jane Eyre! I must be a simpleton too...:P

There we go! Much better. :D

Ahh, sorry! I didn't see this! Anyway, I'm going to critique after yeah. See you then.

That's one of my drives for writing Hourglass. Even if only like five people will ever read it, they're getting YA fiction that [is going to be] more realistic, and ...

It's nice to read a little Georgia Nicolson every once in awhile, but if every novel's like that, then it gets very tiring.

^^ Hehe, so true. The sentences could be worked on a bit, but the plot's so good it pretty much overrides everything else.

I thought the title was pretty cheesy, until I read this. COOLNESS! I'd critique waaay more in depth if I didn't want to read the next part so badly...

HAHAHAHA!!! Greatness, dear. :P

I do have to say I enjoyed the first stanza though. That was pretty funny. :P

That never works. Just keep the indentations as they are...and if you need help with paragraphs, I could do that for you again...:P

Um...lovely? Hehe. Must be good, there's lots of exploding things.

Aye. Not much else to say! :D