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I know this is old- but it's a cool story, nonetheless. STUFF YOU DID WELL: - Notch an hum- just dumb enough to be clever. :wink: Honestly, who thought something ...

Ahoy! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - You've got a cool introduction. Usually I don't like the conversational stuff in a narrator- but you pulled it off really well. - The ...

All right...here goes. :P I very much liked the thing about 'is this how the old man feels?'. Good stuff- but it could be reinforced, mainly because it seems to ...

Ahoy! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - The line that was on the end of the blade about memories was very cool. It definitely had a mysterious feel to it. - ...

Haven't seen you around the forums before...so, hey! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - The perspective (perspective, not POV, because you're in Omnipotent) switch between random characters gave us a little ...

I shall do this by section, just because it's easier that way... SECTION ONE: THINGS YOU DID WELL: - Your third paragraph. The description of the book was very real- ...

Okay, so...I'm really bad at critiquing poetry, mainly because I don't know what it's supposed to look like, and when I argue things, people can smell my ignorance and go, ...

Ahoy! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - Personally, I'd classify this as a fanfic- and you did really well pulling off Georgia. Of course, it wasn't identical, but it is really ...

*is extremely proud* You actually put in some of my suggestions! Two more things: - The November wind (again). Obviously, it'll be cold. It'll add to the starkness that you're ...

I've got really very little to complain about...but of course, that wouldn't be the way of the SPEW. :wink: So! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - The symbolism was fantastic. Usually ...

*waves* Hiya, Willow! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - You create a bit of strife for your character to go through without going overboard. The other characters are the ones concerned- ...

Ahoy, Stevie! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - I've got to agree with MH- the names were really awesome. That's always a plus when you're trying to make your piece memorable. ...

Ahoy! Anyway...I have read some of your other work and some of your critiques and you could say that I'm a bit of a fan. :) So! In return... STUFF ...

All right! So, I shall rant for a bit and then...you WILL enjoy it. :wink: STUFF YOU DID WELL: - AMAZING imagery- indeed, very eloquent and pretty. Especially for what ...

Yay! Another 13-year-old! (I had my birthday three days ago- I feel very grown up. :P) STUFF YOU DID WELL: - You've got an interesting main character. She's rich, but ...