Sam

Ack, I know I sound like a broken record, but separate your paragraphs, please! It's much easier to read (even though it was pretty nice already, with the big font ...

Okay, before I begin, here's my usual 'Welcome to the Forums' spiel- please, separate paragraphs! Indents are nice, but it's much easier to read when everything is neat and organized. ...

Welcome to YWS! You might actually have been here for four years, but at the rate NaNoWriMo's going I must have missed you...:wink: Before I actually begin, a quick tip- ...

Hehe, I'm procrastinating on my NaNoWriMo project- but it doesn't feel like procrastination any more. I really enjoyed this piece- you've got a great style already in place (and *gasp* ...

You requested a SPEWlish critique, but since you've already got a few good ones, I'll keep this one fairiy short. I like the fact that you were really trying to ...

Hey! Let me format this really quickly and then we shall get started on the more substantial things, all right? Teri paced around the room, wondering about her daughter and ...

I liked Humbert a lot more than I did Lolita...the character, anyway. :wink: I love the way Nabokov writes- it's very detached and random, but sort of Lemony Snicket for ...

Welcome to YWS! You have impeccable style and a flawless narrative, so why didn't this quite do it for me? (Oh, dear, I shouldn't have started off the message like ...

*salutes* Ahoy! So, I'm Sam, and when I critique I look at the stuff I like, and then the stuff I'd change. I'm...er...detail-oriented, but really, I'm nice. :P STUFF I ...

You have an Andromeda in your sci-fi, too ? Great minds think alike...:wink: So, for once, I agree with smaur. Shall there be more prettiness- or not? I'm leaning toward ...

Ahoy! I like to pick out a lot of stuff- but I'll be gentle. Just for you. :wink: STUFF YOU DID WELL: - I liked your spin on the 'it's ...

Ahoy! I quite like the first line- it doesn't make a whole lot of sense, and the poem could do a little more to have it make sense, but it's ...

I'm back for more. :D STUFF YOU DID WELL: - Oh, dear. Your characters really have stood the test of time- and they've changed over the past chapter. Not in ...

Ahoy! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - I'm a total sucker for the whole Victorian-romantic-love-story thing. Good stuff- and you pulled it off well. - I also quite like the fact ...

Tell me, why has no one critiqued this? :wink: Okay, so...I'm not normally a gushy person. I've never written a 'It's good! Write more!' critique in my life (at least ...