I can't add more to what has already been said. With Taro you have him changing personalities, he's protective of his family and then slightly mischevious.
I would especially love to know what the horse and the wolf play to this story. Since your other posts are long too I'll take time to give a more vivid critique for them.
The only problem I had was the over-descriptive sentences, I couldn't really concentrate on them. Make some choppy.
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