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Thank you, Medusa, for the input. I'll be fixing those errors when I have a bit more time on my hands, seeing as right now I have five minutes before ...

Thank you lethero for pointing out the grammatical errors. I have fixed them now and would be greatful for any opinions as to whether or not my story is compelling ...

I could be a serious dousche about the fact that you ignored my story and asked me a question I've had to answer about a million times Kyte, but I ...

Your description is great, allowing a clear mental image. I'm not much of a wolf fan personally (I find them to be a little overdone, just like well done steak) ...

Well, this is it, my final revision of this story. Whether or not it is liked I'm going to continue it just because I want to actually finish a story ...

Yeah, sorry it took such a long time for me to revisit this story, I just had some things going on in real life that I had to deal with. ...

Thanks everyone. Your posts have helped me to realize that this part of the prologue is very cliched so I plan to have a revised version, including the entire prologue ...

Thanks guys for the replies. By the way my name is Daniel not David but atleast you remembered the D. Anyway, I'm glad to see the positive feedback. I know ...

Thanks Alainna, I made the changes you suggested all except for the first one. "such a thing is truly symbolic of the deeds I have caused" the only reason I ...

Good story. I like Pikara's personality. The only problem was some occasional infodumping but there wasn't that much so it's all good. I hope to read the next chapter.

Squallz thanks for the critiquing. Well, the reason I haven't tried to give the reader a connection to Bellin yet is because this story isn't about him but about his ...