Ryukun7

This is a very original and awesome story, as usual :D I really liked Addive and Suki's mysterious relationship, and how you built up the plot around those two. The ...

I love this story so far :D :D It's very original and unique. It really makes me wonder about Hunter, and what exactly happened to him--the plot really ties you ...

Terrific job with this piece!! :D I think all the little mistakes have been pointed out. I really like the repetition in this too. It works very well in sending ...

This is indeed a very nice and cute story! :) I'm a little late on the critique, since it seems everyone has caught the grammatical errors. Personally, I thought it ...

Hey, Snoink! :D Like everyone else, I think you have a good piece going on. There is really nothing grammatical wise to correct. The only "critique" I have is about ...

I love fantasy stories; especially ones that involve mysteries such as this one. I like how you started the story, and I've already become quite attached to Emma and Mrs. ...

Hey BigBadBear! First off, I would like to say you did an excellent job of capturing a chat room atmosphere. I actually used a chat room in one of my ...

Excellent piece. :D As a sci-fi fan, this really hooked my interest. I think all the right elements are there. I didn't really catch any errors, which means you did ...

Hey midnightwolf92! I'll just start off with a small critique. I agree that this seems somewhat like a video game or anime(which I like both, so that isn't bad), but ...

I always fall for stories like this. :D It was Saint Patrick’s Day—an event that calls for great celebration in my family, so my father had invited far too many ...

I love this piece. The description of Alan is well done! Personally, I regret that is was so short. I truly think you should expand this story to be longer. ...

My first thoughts on this piece is that it is both well-written and hauntingly realistic. “Hey Sandi, hand me another,” I slurred, as I reached my hand out to her. ...

This is very cute, and I can entirely understand the character. She is proud to wear her dress, but doesn't want to be mocked. She is also self-conscious, and I ...

This really touched me. The couple's promises to stay together, but the harsh reality that came later was crushing and depressing. I truly liked the woman character in this, and ...

To start off, I think this story is AMAZING! I'm sorry I didn't critique the other parts, but I was so hooked that I kept reading! You are indeed the ...