Rydia

No problem and that's great, if the place is described in chapter one, you probably don't need to give us much more detail here - just a reminder of where ...

No prob :)

I think it would certainly help if it was clear what the latin meant the first time or two, or if you're not using much latin you could put it ...

By the way, reviews on your own work don't actually count as reviews. This piece is out of the green room now though because mine did but if you want ...

A girl can be stolen from her father though or from her friends or even a husband. It doesn't really tell us where you're stealing her from. Annnnd you're right, ...

Ah, that makes a bit more sense now! Maybe try and include something about her old boyfriend then or the rival for love? That might make it clearer :) And ...

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Hullo fellow reviewer! Thought I'd check this out. Now please note I've not read any earlier chapters so if I say something which you think you've already covered, please ignore. ...

No problem!

No problem and yes I agree, not having the commas definitely helps with the flow! I think that's part of what bothered me about the word being there. Glad I ...

Haha, it's Rii-dee-ah (rhymes with Lydia) and thanks for clearing up the MC's gender - that makes more sense now! This is the trouble with coming to a story part ...

If this gets marked as a review, I'm gonna un-mark it or else I will never catch up!

Thank you very kindly for the review! I'm actually revising this novel at the moment so it's a good time to get comments and I'll take another look at that ...

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! I'm really fond of zombies as well, I'd love to write a novel about them some day :)

Paw and more are a half rhyme so that totally counts :p Because paw sounds like pore so you've got the rhyming sound. I'll admit that other stanza broke the ...

Thank you and I will :)