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Re: in which the sun travels
No problem! And I think poetry can be visual to a degree, there's certainly a whole branch of poetry called Shape poetry which aims to create an image on the ...
May 3, 2016 -
Re: Untitled, Chapter Two
That makes sense! I go in and out of phases of writing as well and I think even when we're not consciously novel writing, our style still adapts slightly or ...
May 1, 2016 -
Re: Untitled, Chapter Two
No problem! The best thing about YWS is that the longer it exists, the better the advise gets because people who came to the site when they were 13 get ...
Apr 30, 2016 -
Re: Rin's Time as an Exorcist: Chapter 1
Yes - I saw the snow comments later and meant to go back up and revise that part so it's fine that Rin finds the night peaceful. Snow can make ...
Apr 28, 2016 -
Re: Untitled, Chapter One
Of course! I'll take a look tonight and see if it's short enough for today's review but I'll grab it at the weekend either way for sure :)
Apr 28, 2016 -
Re: Snowflake
No problem!
Apr 26, 2016 -
Re: Untitled, Chapter One
No problem and it could well be little pieces of memory leaking through which made me wonder if she'd killed him. I did wonder if the line about snoring was ...
Apr 22, 2016 -
Re: Among the shadows the leaves sleep
No problem, sometimes simple does work best and I can understand you not wanting to over-complicate things. With the rhythm, it sounds stretched or halting in places. Try reading the ...
Apr 19, 2016 -
Re: .
I'm a fan of birds of prey too so that's really cool! I love Kestrels in particular and I'm swaying toward using it as a name should I one day ...
Apr 18, 2016 -
Re: .
Ah I see! It's not a bird I'm familiar with but I like the idea of having another ship named after a bird :)
Apr 17, 2016 -
Re: Only One
No problem! :)
Apr 15, 2016 -
Re: Gabe's Last Race
That's better! :)
Apr 5, 2016 -
Re: The Void
No problem! With active vs passive, it's how a sentence is phrased. For example, it would be passive tone to say 'The dog was killed by the man' because the ...
Apr 5, 2016 -
Re: Dreams of Stars Chapter 20 (Once Upon a Time)
xD That's okay! There are quite a few people called Heather on this site and no problem, glad I could help :)
Apr 3, 2016 -
Re: I Could Fly
Beautiful! And I forgot to say before that I love that you had the line-break at 'break'. Subtle little things like that are what make me love poetry.
Apr 2, 2016