Rydia

Oh look, another chapter I can review :) Specifics 1. Jamin shut the door behind him with a short smirk. She had taken the bait. He had been almost certain ...

Guess who? Specifics 1. She hated the religion of this place, how it didn't allow her to have a normal life, one like a human. This feels really redundant and ...

Haiii Auxi! Specifics 1. This is the start of the new chapter and even though you've titled it with her name, we need to know who she is. Always start ...

Haiiii! I'm trying a new tactic for review day, it's called pre-reviewing chapters of novels which are in the green room in the hopes of then reviewing those chapters on ...

Oh look, it's chapter three! :p Specifics 1. 'ceremony stuff' makes the ceremony seem unimportant or like Sage doesn't think of it as important which feels out of character after ...

Next chapter! Specifics 1. The plaza shimmered a glistening gray, rutted and pitted from hundreds, perhaps thousands of feet and hooves pounding the snow into hard-packed ice. The sun beat ...

Hullo! You've got a lot of chapters of this in the green room so I thought I'd start reviewing the earlier sections and then maybe they'll still be there by ...

Hey there! I'm going to start by giving some line by line comments as I read through and then try to sum up my thoughts at the end: Specifics 1. ...

The last section! I want to start by telling you that I think it's great that you're writing a novel and you shouldn't let anything I or other reviewers say ...

Specifics 1. These sections really do need to be longer - it's hard to get immersed in your world and the characters in such a brief portion of text and ...

Only me again! I'm sure you know the drill by now :) Specifics 1. The first sentence is a little awkwardly phrased. I'd suggest going with something more descriptive and ...

Hullo again! You should probably fix up your formatting on this one as the bold and italics aren't doing you any favours. These aren't the kind of tricks you can ...

Hi Ryu! I think it must be something like two months since I promised you a review and bookmarked this page and I'm so sorry it has taken me so ...

Hello! Thought I'd choose something recent :) Specifics 1. The first line's not really grabbing me. It's a bit plain and there are a lot of poems out there which ...

Hullo! I'll make some observations as I read through and then try to give a few overall impressions/ pieces of advice at the end. Specifics 1. From Koby’s vantage point ...